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Sue Fagalde Lick's avatar

Wow. This is an amazing poem the last lines are truly chilling.

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Raquel's avatar

Hooked from the first line.

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Jamie Alex's avatar

That first line! Wow 😮 It’s an ordinary activity but the assonance with the “o” sound makes it intriguing and intense. I can feel the storm approaching before it arrives.

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Francis Dylan Waguespack's avatar

🥁

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Jamie Alex's avatar

🙌🏽

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T R Poulson's avatar

Beautifully written poem with deeper implications than the immediate aftermath of hurricanes. The spacial form works beautifully.

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Francis Dylan Waguespack's avatar

Thank you ❤️‍🔥

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Alex Dawson's avatar

Awesome poem 🙌🏻🙌🏻 love the creative formatting! Congrats on your publication here, friend 🔥

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Francis Dylan Waguespack's avatar

Thank you Alex!!!

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Travis Lowe's avatar

This hits hard for someone who's been through hurricanes and tgeir aftermath in several different states and countries. The violence is so short. The aftermath is so long.

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Phraser's avatar

Nice poem. Would prefer the ending be no one’s screaming

bc they’ve been saved

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Francis Dylan Waguespack's avatar

I think I would prefer that ending too (in real life) but it doesn’t match up with my experiences.

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Phraser's avatar

It’s a double entendre

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