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Hello — reading your poem felt like slipping into someone’s thoughts mid‑stride, the way a mind actually moves when it isn’t trying to impress anyone. The way you start with fungi battling under the bark feels so strangely intimate, like you’re paying attention to the quiet wars no one else notices. Then you drift into fences, neighbors, Jakarta, trampolines — all these tiny borders and permissions that make up a life. What really hit me was that moment of wanting to be the wine in someone’s cup; it’s such a soft, unguarded confession, the kind that escapes before you can dress it up. And the honesty of admitting that most days you just want the wanting — that felt painfully human. The ending, with the gambler’s hidden ace and the maid pouring milk, feels like you’re searching for a painting that gives you a way out, or maybe a place to rest. The whole poem moves like someone trying to understand their own hunger one image at a time.

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