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Falen's avatar

The longing!

Evan C. Loving's avatar

I dig the break from magical realism, rooting the speaker in the grips of reality's yearning and the journey's inevitable end.

Ella B. Winters's avatar

This is so, so clever!

XiarSure's avatar

I like it’s soft balance between reality and imagination those little moments of creative touch are pure gold

José A. Alcántara's avatar

I love the light touch of magical realism, those empathic purple cabbages and the six-thousand-year waiting period. Just enough to give the hard reality its soft edges.

Juliette Olympia Watkinson's avatar

Mikko Harvey making cabbages holy, whenever I see their name on a page, I stop what I'm doing and read.

Karin Sometimes's avatar

Delightful, surreal, and so absurdly real too, leading to that terrible, inevitable moment of separation.

T R Poulson's avatar

Good surreal poems are difficult to poll off, and I really love it when they do. I think it’s the ending that really makes this one work

Bill Scott's avatar

A modern version of Ezra’s “Separation on the River Kiang.” Heartfelt without being sentimental, in a simple package.

Jordan Marcum's avatar

So beautiful

lchristopher's avatar

The rhymeschema of this work is simple but runs strong under its own steam. Thanks ever so. +1