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Jennifer Laine's avatar

I love how so much is conveyed with so few words! Excellent little poem.

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Gary Michael Dault's avatar

Luminous. Taut without being terse or remote. There is a spareness in this quiet little poem that is as loud as thunder.

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Jonathan's avatar

Ellipsis are underused. They offer a cue to thoughtfulness, a rhythmic pause, as well as potentially unsaid language. White space, I think, is used by some poets for the same purpose but it is a burden on readers--is it intentional or not?--whereas the ellipsis is the poet holding hands with the reader (something more poets should do).

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