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T R Poulson's avatar

The windy sky’s a locket for your hair. I love how the poem just keeps getting better, line by line. And the rhymes. Living proof that rhyme, when used in the right way, is most definitely not dead

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Karan Kapoor's avatar

Yes, that is accurate! Just that rhyme now is really difficult to pull off.

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T R Poulson's avatar

And for the few of us who love rhyme, that makes us all the more determined to celebrate rhymes that work, and to write rhymes that work :)

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Gary Michael Dault's avatar

Good ol' Lennie, I knew him, Horatio!

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mairéad's avatar

one of my favourites of his, so beautiful

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Anew Mirror's avatar

Your poem has such tenderness—the ache of vows, horizons, and beauty woven into memory. It reminded me of my own writing, where I explore not just love, but the invisible debts we carry.

Here’s one of mine:

I swallow my feelings.

My skin voices them anyway.

A giggle slips through,

the body’s way of paying a debt

I never signed for.

That little fragment is from my book, Soul Mortgage™ & the Lexicon Serum™.

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If it resonates, I’d love for you to read, share, and leave a review on Amazon. Thank you for opening this space for words.

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Ella B. Winters's avatar

Oh you can never go wrong with Leonard Cohen! 💚

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